Poetry: Playing with Cinquains

I like to try different forms of poetry from time to time. The Cinquain is a deceptively simple form--deceptive because although it's short and sounds relatively easy to write, it can actually require a great deal of wordsmithing to complete one.


Below are two kinds of cinquains:

Traditional cinquains are based on a syllable count:
line 1 has two syllables

line 2 has four syllables

line 3 has six syllables

line 4 has eight syllables

line 5 is back to two syllables


Here are three attempts I made at a Type 1 cinquain:

1.

My hand
Shows signs of age
Wrinkles and painful joints
yet still grips a yellow pencil
and writes


2.

Children
All laugh and play
In a universal language
Even when winds of war destroy
Their world

3.

Children
Dance with old grace
As they play summer games
Their voices sweetly chant the songs
Of youth


There is another type of cinquain: the modern cinquain. It is based on a word count; the words, however must be the right kind of words!

line 1: an noun, a title or name of the subject of the poem

line 2: two adjectives describing the title

line 3:- three verbs describing an action related to the title

line 4: four words of any kind describing a feeling about the title--but these four words must make a complete sentence

line 5: one word that refers back to the title of the poem


Here are my Type 2 attempts:

1.
Freckles
Round, orange
Dot splash puddle
Sun-paint is rain-soft
kisses

2.
Cooking
early aromatic
brew fry toast
Come and get it
breakfast

Care to give it a try and share your results?