Here's what I came up with:
Choice
photo citation: Steve Dewey,
Utah State University, Bugwood.org
Steam rose from the blue pottery mug. An age-spotted hand lifted it unsteadily.
A sip. A sigh.
The cup returned to the counter.
Another hand, young and soft, picked it up.
“Good?”
“Yes.”
“Ready?”
“Yes.”
“This is how you want it?”
Steam rose from the blue pottery mug. An age-spotted hand lifted it unsteadily.A sip. A sigh.
The cup returned to the counter.
Another hand, young and soft, picked it up.
“Good?”
“Yes.”
“Ready?”
“Yes.”
“This is how you want it?”
“Yes. Good-bye, dear.”
She’s gone now.
It’s time.
Six, dressed in black, filed in.
She’s gone now.
It’s time.
Six, dressed in black, filed in.
If you want to give this a try, be sure to go to Mr. Know-It-All's blog and leave him a comment on his Flash 55 post. It was his idea, after all. It's a good exercise for writers to hone their words to the minimum.
Oh, wow--you've sent my imagination in fifty different directions with that one, imagining all the possible backstories. Terrific! And the lovely hemlock, a nice touch.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Susan! and thank you for suggesting this site. I love it.
ReplyDeleteGreat story. It has so many possiblities.
ReplyDeleteThe other reason for writing a 55 and the reason I try is simply because its fun. I have no talent to hone.
This is cool.
ReplyDeleteBrevity is not my strong point, so maybe I should try it.
Thanks for the link.
Wow! You have a powerful imagination, girlfriend! I wrote a Flash55 Story yesterday and posted it on my Blog. Then when I sent G-Man a comment, he looked at my story and in his comment he asked that I contact you to let you know you need to send him a link to your blog so he can read your story. I was confused about how to do that, also, so I put my blog address in the comment I left for him. (Did I say all that in 55 words or less? Noooooo!)
ReplyDeleteFrickin FINALLY!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteAnyway...Granny Sue, did you have fun doing this?
I hope so because I sure would like you playing again next week.
I Loved your 55. I'll mark this on my Fav's so I can be on-time as well.
Have fun at your convention...Galen
Well, like I was GONE for a couple days. Then had to go search online just how to do the link. I'm as savvy with this as I need to be, so I just learn to do things when it's necessary to do the next thing I want to do.
ReplyDeleteI loved the exercise. I do similar ones sometimes at one-minute writer, and at First50. Often the short piece gives me an idea for something longer.